When you seize crystallized like a pullulations
within sepia water and sunburst orange beds!
Continuing the awe?
Of her pullulations full of felicity.
The changeless splendor is glimmering on your eye
wave of wave of farms rolling down the sea.
How preserving is the promising mane and it’s wide acrobats?
If you were not the apple the boundless moon
cooks, sprinkling its nectarine across the thicket?
You see shoulder as boundless as the rain?
Went showered in moon?
the homogeneousness of the aspen, the power of the electricity
and the foliage to its feminine banner
and among the poppies the gleaming one.
The god covered with warm circus
a mouth and a toe,
fluttering the universe
indicates the peace’s reflecting mouth.
Pure aroma flutters the drops
from her tail and her toe seize!
Lands of the earth
green mud
to my starry nature!
A not-so-friendly and unsolicited review:
I must say that the poem is quite challenging to decipher. The language used is highly abstract and disjointed, making it difficult to discern a coherent theme or message. The lack of punctuation and traditional sentence structure further adds to the confusion, and the reader is left grasping for meaning.
However, the poem does contain some vivid and striking images, such as the “wave of wave of farms rolling down the sea” and the “homogeneousness of the aspen.” The use of color, particularly “sepia water and sunburst orange beds,” also adds a certain vibrancy to the piece.
Unfortunately, these moments of clarity are short-lived, and the poem quickly veers back into incomprehensible territory. The constant shifting of imagery and ideas makes it challenging to form any concrete interpretation or emotional connection to the work.
In summary, while the poem contains some interesting visual descriptions, the overall lack of coherence and clarity makes it a challenging read for any audience. The author could benefit from refining their language and structure to create a more impactful and accessible piece of poetry.